Yesterday I worked on The Astrals. Between breaks for food, bathroom runs, and anime marathoning, I spent 7+ hours editing, rewriting, and re-rewriting. Oh, and I had a Eureka! moment that solved several plot problems at once. Never let it be said that chocolate can’t fuel my inspiration.
Thanks to my wonderful Scribophile critters, I have a lot of feedback to consider. It took me four hours to revise Chapter 5, and I spent several more hours on Chapter 6.
Chapter 5’s edits involved a lot of revising/editing and fact-checking, but other than rewriting a large part of the battle scene (I had POV issues which have now been resolved), most of the chapter is still as it was, just better.
After Chapter 5, I went back and rewrote a section of Chapter 1, solving one issue and opening the way for me to solve another issue that starts in Chapter 6.
When I started on Chapter 6, however, I began expanding the opening scene. Several of my critters had problems with how the events unfolded, and I agreed with them–expansion was necessary.
The expansion turned into almost 3000 words written in the space of a couple of hours; in other words, I’d almost written a new chapter and hadn’t even gotten halfway through the events of Chapter 6; and things had changed around so much that a lot still needs to be rewritten before I can join it to the rest of the narrative.
Although I have a lot of work left to do on Chapter 6, yesterday’s progress has me in high spirits. Not only is the rewrite much better than the original chapter, but it’s also letting me delve into POVs I haven’t explored much yet (my story is told from various POVs of the MCs.)
In celebration of my progress, I’d like to share a brief snip from the rewritten Chapter 6. It’s from the viewpoint of Sharque, a water astral with dangerously weak powers.
Sharque lay awake for a long time, staring at the shadows dancing across the cragged ceiling. She could see the faint flicker of her aura if she raised her hand; it almost looked like a trick of the firelight. Junebug’s words from earlier echoed in her ears. Your aura almost went out… Closing her eyes, Sharque rolled onto her side and did her best to push away the thoughts crowding her mind.
A stubborn one refused to leave, however.
I almost died today.